Evaluation of Ironman

Iron man showed many traits of the six traits of writing. In Ironman it showed organization, individual voice, word choice, and sentence fluency. First it showed organization because first of all it went in order. First he started training for the triathlon and as the book went on he trained deeper and harder until he got to his final goal which was winning the triathlon. Second i choose individual voice. My reason for choosing that would have to be because throught the entire book he had his thoughts like he was thinking out loud. This is help full because you are able to get a different side of the character that you had never seen before. You can connect with them on a different level because you can connect what you are reading with your real life. An example of this would be "I lost the time and I lost the sleep and I lost the money. Even the way you think, that ought to be enought of a punishment"(crutcher 82). In this quote you can see that he is trying to talk himself out of a punishment that he doesnt think he deserves because it was all his so he thinks he should be able to do anything he wants with his stuff and doesnt want to be told differently. Now everybody that i know can connect with this because nobody is perfect and we all do things differently, that means doing things differently then our parents too. So what we think is right is wrong to them and we get introuble for something we thought was right. Last but not least i choose sentence fluiency. Some examples of this would be "Had a great workout last night Lar. got home form pizza with Mr. S about seven-thirty, hitched up the dogs one at a time, and ran ' em five miles apiece. Then i went over to CFU and swam the last forty-five minutes of open lap swimand worked out on the Stairmaster for thirty minutes. Then i lifted weights"(crutcher 152). This paragraph really flows and it doesnt change the subject at all. It is all describing the one workout he had within that night before. The correct grammer was also used in the paragraph even though he shortened some of the words he showed individual voice in what he wa saying.